Proof read my critique?

Sorry, I simply don't have the time to give this a detailed crit. It's basically fine, but I would question whether "big-worded banter" is at all accurate in describing how people think of Shakespeare - "banter" is like "repartee", informal comic chit-chat back and forth, and it seems to sit very awkwardly here. The other thing that struck me as odd was your mention of Shakespeare as "the old man" - he isn't, and never was, an old man.